Poetry Competition Round 1: Love

[onealien]

Ok, sorry for the delay...

first entry should be about love...lost, forgotten, gained, falling in, blah blah...anything with the underlining theme of love...

all pieces need to be submitted to me BY PM ONLY...i will then add them to this thread anonomously (tx CD) with numbers, this way there will be no bias when voting...voters will simply either list the number they like or list the poems numerically in order of appeal...

anyone can enter, even if you did not drop an "im in" on the sign up thread...that was just to see who was interested...

lets say no later than Friday AM...but if you got one sooner send it in...

word up peeps...

[onealien]

ive only got 2 entries so far ppl...
plus mine...3 total out of like 6 ppl who said "im in"?

[Bushi]

i officialy announce my withdrawal from this competition as i wont make deadline.

good luck to all the participants

[Vinnie P]

This sucks, i knew only a few people will participate. Just post the three poems and thats all.

[Bushi]

i apologize for the no show, but i couldnt get time to come up with somth.

especially with that subject...

right now my love poems gotta be spoken, not written.

[onealien]

Let the voting begin!

just pick a winning number out of 3...
we will announce who's it was before 'Round 2: War'...

#1. Trance of Love
The vast ocean is idyllic, as the sand alleviate our fall
The wind is so lively, playing gently with her spiral curls
I can feel her whole tenderness overwhelming my body
And our lips collide in a blissful myth

This is a trance my dear, a transition of feelings
A breathtaking trip between the round earth and the infinite cosmic vision
It’s a trance of love

The midnight sun is mixing the blue of the ocean with the orange
And I feel the warmth of her hands caressing my back
I feel ecstatic, as she put a quixotic spell on this heavenly moment
Romance thrive like a flower and I can smell the aroma soaring in the air

This is a trance my dear, a transition of feelings
A breathtaking trip between the round earth and the infinite cosmic vision
It’s a trance of love

As our bodies contact I can feel the vibe of her heart accelerate
Its a nostalgic melody from the paste sweeping my present and constructing my future
It’s so vivid like an historical painting, a replica of our love
The ocean is still idyllic as I feel the deepest feeling from above

Trance of love


#2. Aborted Love

I could never swim in seas
or play on plateaus high
or never fell upon the ground
felt pain that made me cry
could never see the animals
that make our planet home
stay in the bed or go outside
watch as the other roam
I'll never see the sunrise
or sun-set on another day
or watch my friends and family
have fun and laugh and play
can never tell my mommy
how much I love her so
and hold daddy in my arms
and he would say how much I've grown
I never saw grandparents that would let me have such fun
for my life was not to be
it never really begun
but the thing I need to say
the thing that hurts the most
is the fact that I would worship you
I would have loved you both


#3. My Gift

she was a blurr, fantasy or reality
i was not really sure
an image of heavenly light
blinding visions like night
blackness fallen upon the day
what should I do? what could I say?
in bashful confusion my head hung low
until an idea sparkled a galactic glow
i'll make a present, artistic construction
to show my soul was it's main function
what could it be to make the desired see
something lovely, something of true originality
a gift to sift me from all to follow
separation will make me the only tomorrow
the search begun, high, low, far and near
oh god, failure was now my only fear
what does an angel want or need?
does a goddess have the ability to bleed?
no I thought not, she was more
she walked across oceans leaving prints on every shore
she looked over crowds and
laid her head down in clouds
to all earthly mortals she was truely foreign
in mother natures image I believed she was born in
the gift of life she possessed...rejuvination
power of understanding, healing without contemplation
a beautiful flower among seas of weeds
capable of fulfilling all of a mans needs
after not finding what I thought to look for
I came to realize all I have said meant more
so these thoughts are what to her I wrote
to her I swore in a vow my life to devote
all I needed to give her holiness from above
was all of me sent in an envelope of love!




tx to the participants...

[Fatal-N-Felony]

how about 3

[Bushi]

man 1 and 3 are impressive.

but im gonna go with 2 for its depht and its unconditional love feel.

while two other poems r strictly about love in the relationship sense, poem 2 i feel the true depth of love, that goes beyond regular relationships

[onealien]

couple more votes wuld be nice so we can move on...


tx...

[Bushi]

cmon mofos we not asking for paragraphs more like "i liked this and bla bla so my vote is x"

is that hard?

IOU free sigs from bushi for whoever votes after this

[RiotRiotRiot]

not the type of stuff I usually fancy in poetry but if I had to pick it'd be number 3, although it reads a bit more like a freestyle.

[Chuck Dirty]

ima roll with number 3 myself...

[jamaal]

k number 3 gets the votes 3 to 1, lets move on

[onealien]

agreed....lets move on...

tx to all who voted...

round 2 thread coming up...