Warning(My 1st RAP)

[War Gamez]

Okay, I decided to try to rap today...and I wanted to diss this local rapper Kansas cuz he jacks everyones styles and flows and gimmicks all that good shit his group is STONER GANG that instantly pisses me off everytime I see them lol so I just went in I guess.....1st time rappin so be eazy on me 1st take also. I know Im off beat sometimes flows a lil off.....forgive me lol.Stay smokey my friendz

My 1st beat....posted awhile back just fixed it

Feedback plz.....

[Omar]

kinda nice man. ur rap... u must really hate that guy...lol..good from a rapping perspective.. but no diss but very eminem like lyrics...lol

loved the beat.. sounds good to me.. has today's flava though.. y dont u rap over it..

well done

[MENTION=1716]War Gamez

[BoNity]

if it was on beat it would be really good man.

[War Gamez]

kinda nice man. ur rap... u must really hate that guy...lol..good from a rapping perspective.. but no diss but very eminem like lyrics...lol

loved the beat.. sounds good to me.. has today's flava though.. y dont u rap over it..

well done

[MENTION=1716]War Gamez

I was thinkin about gettin on it I just made it didnt really think to put myself on it. Em and Pac are my influences so it makes sense its Eminem like I guess.

if it was on beat it would be really good man.

Im thinkin about redoing it but im waitin on my other dudes to record theirs...thankz guys

[SabiMixx]

you should definitely re-do it. you can rap, your flow is good (Y)

[Creation]

great work man,

my advice, you need to go back over & do it again, clean it up a bit
take it off youtube for now in my opinion till u finish it

[War Gamez]

Thanks guys......ima leave it up there as my 1st take. love the feedback ima re do it soon.

[HAL 9000]

you should take some more time to do this man.... i really like what you got goin with your flow.. it just seems like you couldnt get it all right on every part...

sounds like it was recorded at a radio station too.. lol.. nice

[Makaveli5458]

Nice Flow But I wouldn't make your first song a diss not a good start might give people the wrong impression you don't need to diss as your first record to be known.

[War Gamez]

True that idk i was just pissed and finally just went off lol.....and yea i wrote this and did it in 1 take so it would make sense its all off beat n shit. Im gonna take my time this time I just wanted to see what people thought b4 I went any further ya feel me?

[Makaveli5458]

[MENTION=1716]War Gamez Make a Song from your heart.

[War Gamez]

I will...this was from my heart lol kinda.....i got 3 more verses for that kid lol