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    Sometimes I just want to go back in time
    Wind it back right away
    Sometimes I just want to go back in time
    Wind it back right away

    Take the infinite melody of the era and set it on the turn tables
    Rewind in a heartbeat, it’s a hard steep travel
    Scratch it, break the minutes make the hours spineless
    Let the time stream in the very form of elegance, flawless
    It’s classiness, moments of pleasure mixed with pain
    I slow down the rhythm to witness the tiny crystal drops of rain
    Time still slipping backwards with style and finesse
    It’s a well written verse, poetry in motion i call this
    I’m still rewinding to change a thing or two
    Within the midnight light I wish to be next to you
    Still rewinding 1,2
    I let earth regain the cosmic gravitation as I’m right next to you

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    Not bad at all, i like the whole theme of it and the choice of words, it's comes together pretty nice. the only part i can think of that could use a slight tweak is this:

    Time still slipping backwards with style and finesse
    It’s a well written verse, poetry in motion i call this

    ^^even that part aint bad though, i just think perhaps another word where "I call this" is would make it come together a little better, maybe change it to "to express" instead.

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